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Love is a Risk Like No Other by ~JustAnEmptySoul:iconJustAnEmptySoul:



Have you ever taken a risk in your life that hurt you, but you know it was worth it because in the end you grew from it?  I know I have: love.  Love is a feeling that is felt in the heart, debated in the mind, and lived through the soul.  Love can be found in a heartbeat, and lost just as fast.  Which makes it a risk like none other experienced.  There is no greater risk to take that is not worth it in the end.  I know from first-hand experience how wonderful love can be, and just how painful it can be when it is ripped from the grasp of the heart, but it was a risk I was willing to take.


My freshmen year of high school, I started dating a boy and soon after I fell in love; I fell as hard and fast as my heart would carry me.  My heart skipped several beats when I saw him across the room, I could barely breathe when we were together, and I got butterflies in my stomach if we sat too close.  I was head over heels in love with him, I was positive of this.  I knew that this was different than any other short-term boyfriend I had had before him, loving every minute of this fairy tale.  I did not want it to come to an end.


However, this love story does have an end.  The day after Valentine’s Day we broke up, and my world crashed down.  I was only fifteen at the time, but a broken heart is a broken heart.  I had experienced love, and never thought it would end.  That feeling of being in love and being loved in return was like no other feeling I had ever felt before.  I tried for about a month to have him back, but all attempts failed, and I soon gave up.  I did not think I could live without a boyfriend after that, but I soon found out that I could make it.


I lived almost a year by myself, but I made it.  I did not think I could live without a boy, but I did. Then in early January 2005, I met another boy that gave me those exact same feelings.  I was afraid to let myself fall again, but I decided that I did not want to be afraid to give my heart to someone anymore.  I ended up falling in love with him, and we were together for about six months. We are no longer together, but I moved on just fine.  I took a risk to fall in love and get hurt.  Love hurts, but it teaches you so much about yourself, and is like nothing else in the world.  I have learned that I can make it on my own.  Falling in and out of love has helped me realized that I am a strong person, and I thank love for showing me that.
©2005-2009 ~JustAnEmptySoul
:iconjustanemptysoul:

Author's Comments

so this is my college essay that I have to write for my career development class for when we apply to college.

we had to write about a risk or some experience in our lives that made an impact on us and how it affected us. I, so much like myself, wrote about love and how it affected me. So yeah, it really goes into myself and my life and stuff....so I hope you like it. I really enjoyed writing this and so I hope my teacher thinks it's a good paper for college. comments please?

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Wow... what a great piece. The first paragraph is wonderful and I LOVE the lines " Love is a feeling that is felt in the heart, debated in the mind, and lived through the soul." Those lines spoke to me and the imagery invoked was amazing. It's a sad story but a perfect story for the subject.

If your teacher doesn't like this paper, do something similar to this: :fork: ... Hehe. Anyways I love this paper, +fave for sure =)

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:iconsparklycherry:
oo just reading that made my stomach go in knots, and yeah that guy is right, if your teacher doesnt like that then he/she is very silly. <3

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My god how scarred we are, to feel so little in somebody's arms.
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first paragraphy has some very poetic description -- the rest of the peice isnt quite as good. izz damn good though!

"and lost just as fast. Which makes it a risk like none other experienced." -- i dont think this is quite right... maybe get rid of the fullstop and put in a comma, i duno... :D but other thn that, izz grrreat ((frosties style))

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Moves on; nor all your Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line,
Nor all your Tears blot out a Word of it.
:iconjustanemptysoul:
hehe, wow. thanks. hm....it isn't supposed to be sad....i mean, in part it was...but did it end happily? or positively?...it's supposed to. they told me that our essays had to end on a positive note....i hope it did! lol. but thanks for the comment i'm really glad you liked it!! :dance:

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~*Dana*~

Anthony and Dana--December 1, 2007
"I'll stop the world and melt with you"
:iconjustanemptysoul:
lol. :D yay!! i'm so glad you liked it! thanks so much

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~*Dana*~

Anthony and Dana--December 1, 2007
"I'll stop the world and melt with you"
:iconjustanemptysoul:
lol. thanks for the input. i'll see what my teachers says when i hand it in. she'd editing it for next year when we start filling out college applications i think. now that you point it out, it doesn't sound right, but i'll recheck it and see what my teacher says.

and yeah, i loved my first paragraph too! lol. it's my favorite part....and yeah...i dont think the rest of it is as good...usually i'm really good at writing the intro...and suck at the rest of the paper. but *shrugs* ah well. i hope it's good enough for college! haha. thanks again!

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~*Dana*~

Anthony and Dana--December 1, 2007
"I'll stop the world and melt with you"
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Oh wow! Incredible good work, I love how it's so personal and relateable too Such stand out lines as "I was only fifteen at the time, but a broken heart is a broken heart." "Love is a feeling that is felt in the heart, debated in the mind, and lived through the soul. " are very powerful, well done, great work =)

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this is great dana

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Josie

¤You cant change who people are without destroying who they were¤

I'm not like them, but I can pretend.

& you bleed just to know you're alive
:iconyour-canadian-angel:
Excellent Essay. I give you an A++ This is from the heart, I can tell. You relived the experience in words, i could feel your pain, i could feel the butterflies. they were all excellent descriptive words. I took some education classes and as a wannabe teacher i think its a very good essay, possibly needs to be a bit longer but i dont know what you could add. Great work dana :hug:

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