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The rain pelts against the window,
and I think of you lieing in your bed.
I wonder if you're thinking of me,
As I lay with thoughts of you in my head.

I pull the covers up to my chin,
And roll onto my side.
A tear rolls slowly down my cheek,
As the rest I try to hide.

My heart is so heavy,
It feels worn and stress galore.
My mind is torn and tired,
It just can't take anymore.

You seem to make me laugh,
And you can make me smile.
Whenever I am with you,
My heart can fly for miles.

You hold me by the waist,
And you take me by the hand,
You kiss me on my forehead,
Whatever cute physical thing you can.

I wish you could hold me,
While I cry here in my bed,
I long to tell you everything,
And all the secrets in my head.
©2005-2010 ~JustAnEmptySoul
:iconjustanemptysoul:

Author's Comments

so I just wrote this now...it's raining...i was thinking about Alex. I dont know, kind of describes how I feel sometimes. i have secrets i long to tell him, but can't. so yeah...lol. old news written about again.

hope you enjoy.

**i edited the like...3rd stanza i think it is...thank you for pointing out a tense mishap**

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:iconyour-canadian-angel:
:hug: just beautiful Dana. I hope you can tell him all you need to tell him soon. *favS*

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:heart::blackrose:This Ring, The Symbol Of My Oath, Will Hold Me To The Words I Speak: All I Refuse And Thee I Chuse:heart::blackrose:

:heart:You're like a drug, You have me addicted. The side effects are the best part!:heart:
:iconpsobloke:
"My heart is so heavy,
With worn and stress galore.
My mind is torn and tired,
It just can't take anymore."

I love it! Extremely well written, great work =)

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- PsoBloke (John)
Check out Everything Sucks to find out why they rock so hard.
:iconsparklycherry:
o.0 you manage to put these feelings in such prettyful words, its lovely <3 and why dont you just tell him?

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My god how scarred we are, to feel so little in somebody's arms.
:iconspamuel:
this isnt your best one, to be honest. i mean, what youre saying is all good - i like the content, but theres the odd mistake here and there and izz difficult to read coz the rhythm isnt as good as your stuff usual is.

"with worn and stress galore" -- izz like, in the present tense, but the word worn is in the past tense, so i had to stop for a sec and make sense of it. -- little things like that.

but izz got alot of potential! :D

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The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ,
Moves on; nor all your Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line,
Nor all your Tears blot out a Word of it.
:iconjustanemptysoul:
thanks, i do too. :hug: back.

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~*Dana*~

Anthony and Dana--December 1, 2007
"I'll stop the world and melt with you"
:iconjustanemptysoul:
thanks for the comment. i like "prettyful" hehe. and it's complicated...it's not something i can just tell him...it's the past and present...and all kinds of stuff...i just can't seem to tell him, it's hard.

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~*Dana*~

Anthony and Dana--December 1, 2007
"I'll stop the world and melt with you"
:iconjustanemptysoul:
yeah....i wasn't really writing it to be poetic, i was more writing it to get my thoughts and feelings out, but thanks for the comment.

and you can use "worn" in the present tense....you can say "it is worn"...so..i dont know, to me it sounds correct..but i dont know...maybe it is wrong. i dont know...to me it sounds right, but maybe i'm just reading it weird in my head.

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~*Dana*~

Anthony and Dana--December 1, 2007
"I'll stop the world and melt with you"
:iconjustanemptysoul:
thanks, but someone told me there was a typo in that line...so i had to rewrite it slightly...check it out and see what you think.

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~*Dana*~

Anthony and Dana--December 1, 2007
"I'll stop the world and melt with you"
:iconyour-canadian-angel:
you're welcome!

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:heart::blackrose:This Ring, The Symbol Of My Oath, Will Hold Me To The Words I Speak: All I Refuse And Thee I Chuse:heart::blackrose:

:heart:You're like a drug, You have me addicted. The side effects are the best part!:heart:

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