I had to write a poem for creative writing class about an incident that happened in our lives or that we witnessed that had 3 uses of enjambed lines and a metaphor or simile. this i what i wrote.

it shows how i knew i loved anthony. i think this is possibly the best i have written so far. i love it.

this is revised from what i originally wrote, so i hope you like it because i worked really hard on it. Unfortunately, my creative writing teacher tore it to shreds, and wanted me to change half the words that made it what it is. she wanted me to change "vulnerability" and take out "froze in time" and the part about the vacuum annihilating the dust. if i take those parts out, it ruins the whole point of the poem. so i'm ignoring what she thinks with this one. i like it the way it is, and so did half the class. if i change it, it wont mean what i want it to mean anymore.